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hi, i turned in this report to one of my classes and got a low B on it i completely disagree with this... can you guys/gals give my your opinion on it? and what i may need to fix. Thank you, it may seems long but its only like 2 pages. im in highschool btw :) “The writer must earn money in order to be able to live and to write, but he must by no means live and write for the purpose of making money†Karl Marx. Having gone through a rough childhood during the early 1800s because of extreme poverty, Marx viewed life in one way that was to help those of the poor be equal to those of the rich. Karl Marx is viewed as the creator of communism, which his theories was and are viewed as wrong and immoral. His ideas were there to help the poor, but have been manipulated by dictators to become a type of authoritarian government, which gave the people NO rights and has been known through its time to abolish all private property. Karl Marx was an ethical, creative, and influential man whose goal was to create equality for all people of the world. As a catalyst for change Karl Marx altered the world in an astonishing way, he inspired such leaders as Lenin, Stalin, Mao Zedong, and even Castro to lead their people in their own version of “communism†which has unfortunately devastated millions of people’s of lives. Those leaders followed his work day in and day out leading it to what it’s known as today a failed government, but it should be known as a government that hadn’t been correctly practiced. In order to view Karl Marx as an effective catalyst for change, one should observe the ethics he had within himself and understand what ethics is. Ethics is defined as the study of moral standards and how they affect conduct. Ethics is a major affair in every profession and is a key topic of philosophical discussions. Karl Marx was a man of ethics. One of his main applications was freedom, which to Karl Marx meant determination. Marx's opinion was that “man is controlled by the basics of nature. The nature of man is comprised of powers, man being uncontrolled, and allows him to comprehend the fullness of his powers,†(Karl Marx selected writings, pg. 207) With such a strong belief in ethics Karl Marx was viewed by a majority of people all over Europe as an unethical man because he didn’t abide by the laws. For example some laws required people to be suppressed and not be able to talk about the government, writing about the media and against the media was wrong, and speaking your mind was wrong. But being ethical is also not the same as following the law. The laws often include ethical standards to which most citizens pledge to. But laws, like feelings, can deviate from what is ethical. Our own pre-Civil War slavery laws and the apartheid (a system of legal racial separation) laws of present-day South Africa are grotesquely obvious examples of laws that deviate from what is ethical. Being ethical is not the same as doing "whatever society accepts." In any society, most people accept standards that are, in fact, ethical. But standards of behavior in society can deviate from what is ethical. An entire society can become ethically corrupt. Nazi Germany is a good example of a morally corrupt society. Karl Marx viewed the government as an unethical creature with absurd powers over the people; he thus made the book Communist Manifesto with his friend Engles who shared the same views as Marx, this book was made to show and talk about the government and how his idea of a new government called communism would revolutionize the world for the better. Additionally to fully understand Karl Marx you must understand his creativity and what exactly creativity is. Creativity is defined as the tendency to generate or recognize ideas, alternatives, or possibilities that may be useful in solving problems, communicating with others, and entertaining others and ourselves. Karl Marx is obviously seen as a creative man by all people since he did create his own government. But that isn’t all that makes him a creative person his ideas, the way he speaks about certain things, and his ability to think for the worlds benefit make him a creative man. For example “ Natural science will in time incorporate into itself the science of man, just as the science of man will incorporate into itself natural science: there will be one science,†(Karl Marx selected writings, pg.128). Marx here is saying that one day Natural science (physical labor) and science (Mental labor) will work by each other side by side as one. What Karl Marx said eventually came true, professions like engineering had arrived, a profession that requires both intensive labor and a mental capacity of math far beyond other professions. Marx’s creativity leads him to theories and ideas like that. Not many men could or can recognize what will eventually occur in time, but Marx being the creative man he is has the tendency to recognize things like this. Karl Marx, unfortunately during hi
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I'm no English teacher, but your paper has numerous gramamtical errors. It's also disorganized, has some sentences that don't make sense, and just isn't coherent. You begin with a Marx quote about writing and then fail to connect it to the rest of the essay, which is about Marx and the impact of his political theories. You state that Marx created his own government -- what government in what country did he create? Marx offered political theory; it was others who put those theories into practice in various governments.
